Ideas: 4
The writer has made a point with the writing. There is no illustration. The main idea is clear. Details are present, but as a list.
Organization: 3
A title was dictated to the teacher, and is "My Dad Got Chased by a Scorpion," not surprisingly. The child has a sense of story, and there is a limited beginning. There is no ending. The child has limited transitions.
Voice: 2
The child communicates little feeling, mostly in the final line. Treatment of topic is predictable and shows limited energy. There is an awareness that someone else will read it, but it could be anyone, anytime.
Word Choice: 3
The writer has taken no risks to use unusual words. The words are general and ordinary, but used correctly. The child has settled for words and phrases which will do.
Sentence Fluency: 4
There are run-on sentences. The writer has used some complex sentences to express thoughts. The sentences do begin in a variety of ways. The child's idea is clearly expressed, requiring no rereading. There is a rhythm and flow to the writing. The child's sentences almost sound like a recitation of the who-what-when-where-why pattern. An argument could be made for scoring the paper a 3. The teacher would need to examine other pieces of writing to assess the child's grasp of sentence fluency.
Conventions: 3
The child misspells many high frequency words. The transitional spelling of scorpion, outside and Texas are phonetic. Sentences begin with capitals, but end punctuation is not always correct. Grammar is standard, and no interpretation is needed to understand the text.
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