Ideas: 3
The writer has attempted to tell a story. The illustration supports the writing. The idea is clear.
Organization: 2
The child writes left to right and top to bottom. The child has a sense of story, but there is no true beginning or ending because there is only one sentence. There is spacing between words.
Voice: 2
The child does communicate some feeling with the drawing of children with happy faces. I immediately thought of the Madeline books when I saw the drawing. The drawing shows energy and enthusiasm. Treatment of topic is predictable. The audience is fuzzy. Notice the letters the child has used. This is an indication of voice.
Word Choice: 3
The writer has chosen ordinary words for the story. There are no attempts at new words. The writer has gone beyond phrases, but not by much.
Sentence Fluency: 3
There is only one sentence, and it is a simple sentence. We cannot compare sentence beginnings, but the child is beyond the state of writing phrases. The child's idea is clearly expressed in this one sentence.
Conventions: 3
The writer has spelled correctly, but all words are high frequency words. Play is written as "paly." There is a mix of upper and lower case letters, and the letters are standard, but embellished. There is spacing between words. There is punctuation. Grammar is standard, but it is a very short piece. An argument could be made for scoring this paper as a 2. The teacher would need to observe more of the child's writing to make an accurate assessment of conventions.
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