Ideas: 3
The writer has attempted to tell a story. The illustration supports the writing. The idea is clear.
Organization: 2
The child writes left to right and top to bottom. The child has a sense of story, but there is no true beginning or ending because there is only one sentence. There is some attempt at spacing between words.
Voice: 2
The child does communicate intense feeling with the drawing. The drawing shows curvy lines, energy, enthusiasm, and happiness. This piece has some individuality, not looking like others. The drawing is what gives this piece voice. The audience is fuzzy.
Word Choice: 3
General and ordinary words are used, but the writer has settled for the least that will do. An argument could be made for a score of 2, because the language is short and functional. However, the child has done more than attempt a phrase.
Sentence Fluency: 2
There is only one sentence, and it is a simple sentence. We cannot compare sentence beginnings. The child is beyond the state of writing phrases, but is still writing short noun-verb sentences. The child's idea is clearly expressed in this one sentence.
Conventions: 3
The child has used phonetic spelling, and high frequency words are spelled correctly. There is a mix of upper and lower case letters, though each is written correctly. There is attempted spacing between words. There is ending punctuation, and it begins with a capital. Grammar is standard, and no student interpretation is needed.
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