Ideas: 3
The writer has attempted to tell a story. The illustration supports the writing. The idea is clear, though the teacher had to write in standard language under the child's writing.
Organization: 2
The child writes left to right and top to bottom. The child has a sense of story, but there is no true beginning or ending because there is only one sentence. There is no attempt at spacing between words.
Voice: 2
The child does communicate some feeling with the drawing. The drawing shows curvy lines, energy and enthusiasm. Treatment of topic is predictable. The audience is fuzzy.
Word Choice: 4
The writer has taken a risk in using the word "battling" instead of the word "fighting." It seems totally natural. The writer has also included a description of the T-Rex, "red-horned." In general, the child has used ordinary words, but these two examples show that he or she has tried to choose specific words. The child has attempted to create images for the reader.
Sentence Fluency: 3
There is only one sentence, and it is a simple sentence. We cannot compare sentence beginnings, but the child is beyond the state of writing phrases, or short noun-verb sentences. The child's idea is clearly expressed in this one sentence.
Conventions: 1
The child has attempted phonetic spelling, but left out most of the vowels. There is no mix of upper and lower case letters. The child has written everything in upper case, but letters are standard. There is no spacing between words. There is no punctuation. Grammar is standard, but student interpretation may be needed to understand the text.
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