Ideas: 4
The writer has made a point with the writing. There is no illustration, since this was a journal entry. The main idea is clear. Details are present, but as a list.
Organization: 3
No title is present, since it was a journal entry. The child has a sense of story, and there is a limited beginning. There is no ending. The child has limited transitions provided by starting each sentence with, "I like about the night...."
Voice: 3
The child communicates some feeling. The writing shows limited energy and enthusiasm. Treatment of topic is predictable, but the final sentence gives a hint of the child behind the words. There is an awareness that someone else will read it and there is a limited connection between the reader and writer.
Word Choice: 3
The writer has taken no risks to use unusual words. The words are general and ordinary, but used correctly. The child has settled for words and phrases which will do.
Sentence Fluency: 3
The writer has used complex sentences to express thoughts. All sentences begin in the same way, but the child is using this as a way of transitioning. The child's idea is clearly expressed, requiring no rereading.
Conventions: 4
The child has spelled all but the word "hear" correctly. There are only high frequency words used in the piece. Sentences begin with capitals, though each sentence begins with "I," and they end with punctuation. Grammar is standard, and no interpretation is needed to understand the text. An argument could be made for scoring the paper as a 3. A teacher would need to monitor further writing for the child to assess conventions.
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